Hermione has just spotted
the Mountain Troll.
Describe
this part of the story in detail. What does the troll look like? How does Hermione feel?
Write in full sentences
with full stops and capital letters. Try using some powerful verbs or adjectives.
I look forward to reading your descriptions.
Hermione would feel petrified and terrified because the troll is 12 ft tall it is obvious that Harry and Ron would have to fight the troll by them selves and Hermione would have to stay hidden.
ReplyDeleteA good start Arjun, It's great that you are trying to use exciting vocabulary. Do you think you could add to this. Try to tell it more like a story by describing how Hermione is behaving and describing how the troll looks and acts.
ReplyDeleteThe troll is as big as a double decker bus and has a club to match his size. Hermione is hiding behind the wall from the troll feeling petrified and freaked because the troll is larger than she expected.Hermione is more petrified than she's been in her life and so shocked that her jaw dropped and she just didn't know what to do.
ReplyDeleteMuch better Arjun. What could you use instead of the word petrified?
DeleteTerrified,scared,horrified
DeleteHermone woule feel very sceard and terrified.The troll was aroudn 12ft tall and he a very .sceary.The troll wa very very agressive and he ruined the whole house.Hermone was very shocked to see such a big monster.
ReplyDeleteCheck your work carefully Brajan before you post it. Could you add some speech between Harry and Hermione?
DeleteThe troll was a 12 feet tall ferocious beast, he had a head perched on the top like a coconut. He held a large wooden club, which had sharp metal bits.
ReplyDeleteAs he moved the club it swished and swayed, this made Hermione flood with fear. She froze with her mouth wide open, she did not know what was going to happen next. Harry and Ron came running in and started hurling things at the troll. Harry took a run and jump , landed on the trolls head and clung on for dear life.
Great description, I really like your use of powerful verbs. Could you have added any adverbs?
DeleteHermione was in the bathroom when suddenly a huge scary troll was standing in front of her with a club in his hand.
ReplyDeleteThe troll was 12 feet tall, he was fat like a ogre with a small head and very big ears!
He was smelly and horrid.
The troll tried to smash Hermione but she hide herself and screamed, Harry and Ron heard her and sprinted towards the bathroom.
Hermione was petrified and shaking, she was relieved that her friends were there to help kill the troll.
Excellent Giacomo. Can you add some speech now?
DeleteTroll was like huge, colossal monster. Troll had rocky, bumpy body and was very very ugly.It was very dirty and stinky too. When Harry and Ron locked it in the toilet it went too crazy and angry.
ReplyDeleteHermione did not expect a humongous troll in the girls’ toilet. She was frightened by seeing angry troll and shouted like freak. She did not know what to do and hid herself behind the door.
Good description! Remember to say 'the troll' unless 'Troll' is its name.
DeleteHemione must of been super scared by the troll. its so tall that it would go through all the roofs.who would ever want too see a gross spotty lumpy body. and if I had to fight that troll id just walk or run away from it because its discusting
ReplyDeleteI agree Hermione must have been scared. What do you think she would say?
DeleteNext time please check your work for missing capital letters and punctuation before you post it.
Hermione was shrinking against the bathroom wall. The troll was 12 feet tall and has a tiny head. The body of the troll was as big as a boulder and he had a giant club
ReplyDeletethat he dragged along the floor. She was so petrified that she could not move. She wished that someone would save her.
Harry and Ron save Hermione by using their magic wand to make the the club fly out of the trolls hand and land on its head so the troll fainted.
As the troll approached, Hermione curled up into a ball. Hermione was terrified of the monstrous creature. His deep growl made the room vibrate. The Troll’s head was brown and furry like a coconut and his ears stuck out like a gorilla. He had a gigantic lumpy body and his skin was grey and dull. The troll sent a tingle down Hermione’s spine and she felt sick from the revolting smell of rotten flesh.
ReplyDeleteLovely description! I like your use of the senses to describe how she feels.
DeleteThe troll has a crumbly face and his breath smell's like a rotten fish
ReplyDeleteand a fat hairy belly and a deep airy arpit and a blood splat eye.
What a horrible troll. Next time please try to write in the past tense.
DeleteHermione was shrinking against the bathroom wall. The troll was 12 feet tall and has a tiny head. The body of the troll was as big as a boulder and he had a giant club that he dragged along the floor. She was so petrified that she could not move. She wished that someone would save her. Harry and Ron save Hermione by using their magic wand to make the the club fly out of the trolls hand and land on its head so the troll fainted.
ReplyDeleteA great description Omar - you've remembered lots of the story. Can you add some speech to give extra detail about how the character is feeling?
DeleteHermione would feel paralized with fear because she must have froze when she saw a 12ft tall troll holding a club. The troll looks ugly because he has dull, grey granite skin and his body was so gargantuan that his head was perched on top like a coconut. He held a mammoth sized club and went insane. It was like a hurricane striking the girls toilet with fury and rage.
ReplyDeleteGood use of adjectives Angelo. Next time can you check you are writing in the past tense please.
DeleteA thousand bats fluttered and swooped over the tables, making the candles in the pumpkins stutter. Suddenly professor Quirrel came sprinting into the hall, “troll in the dungeons!” he gasped. Thought you ought to know. Noise exploded in the great hall as everyone started talking.
ReplyDeleteThe troll was twelve foot tall. He had grey granite skin, he had horns as sharp as knifes. He held a colossal wooden club. Hermione felt petrified, a shiver ran down her spine. Her legs began shaking and she froze solid. She wondered if the troll was going to thump her with the extended wooden club?
Wow you've remembered the story so well. Do you need a question mark at the end of the last sentence?
DeleteThe troll looked vigios and ugly, his body was covered with lumps and his head was like a coconut. It was about 12 feet tall, 50 times longer than hermione. Hermione was terrified and frightened. She thought that it's the end, and she wished thatshe wasn't alive that moment.
ReplyDeleteGreat additional detail with '50 times longer than Hermione'. Is vigios supposed to be vicious?
DeleteThe troll is very tall in fact he is twelve feet tall. He is grey and has a lumpy body with a big wooden club. He also has big fat legs and chunky feet. Hermione is dressed in a black gown with a orange and yellow tie. Her hair is orange and worn down. They are both in a toilet which is dark and damp. The troll is looking down at Hermione and she is looking up at him. Hermione seems vey scared and still.
ReplyDeleteHermione found the ugly troll in the bathroom. He was as big as a house, around 12 ft tall ! His skin's colour was grey and his eyes where terrifying. He held a ginormous club.
ReplyDeleteHermione just freezed, she was petrified, terrified and shocked. She didn't know what to do.
The mountain troll just came out of the prison.He met Hermione on his way.The troll saw Harry Potter and Ron they started to fight and Hermione hidden some where she was feeling terrified and screaming loudly.the troll was very ugly and its body was very lumpy.The troll was trying to kill Hermonie with axe,but Harry Potter jumped on the trolls back and stuck a stick up his nose and then Ron did a spell and the axe fallen on the troll head.The troll has died.
ReplyDeleteThe troll looked vigios and ugly, his body was covered with lumps and his head was like a coconut. It was about 12 feet tall, 50 times longer than hermione. Hermione was terrified and frightened. She thought that it's the end, and she wished thatshe wasn't alive that moment.
ReplyDeleteas troll apeared from the shadows hermione trembled in terror and disgust.
ReplyDeleteThe troll looks like a coconut but with no hairs with a hairy belly and breath that smells
ReplyDeletelike rotten fish and it's skin look's as dark as mold!!!
Hermione would screem so hard that she would blow of your ear drums. Hermione would faint bacuse she is scared of trolls.The troll could of been starving to death because he must of never had any food for years.
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